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Question : Is this a good beginning to a teens book?
Spending the last day of school sick in bed, wasn’t what I planned. I planned to spend it with my friends, in the gloomy hallways of our high school. When the final bell would ring, we would all go to the beach and start soaking up the sun. But, no, my plans were ruined thanks to my nausea and fever. After watching a few minutes of never ending commercials, I flicked off the TV and got up out of bed. My feet were cold once they touched the bamboo flooring in my room. I shiver and pull a blanket off my bed and wrap it around me. I walk to the top of my stairs, about to take the first step down, and I hear my stomach growl. The kitchen was in front of the stairs, so I didn’t have a long way to go to get to my destination. My kitchen was small, just a fridge, a pantry, a stove, a microwave- the normal deal. I could still smell the bowl of chicken noodle soup I left on the counter this morning. I grab the bowl then go to the pantry and grab some saltine crackers. I sit down at the kitchen table and start eating my cold soup, one spoonful at a time. My house was quiet. It always was ever since my dad died three years ago. He had a heart attack and he was gone before the ambulance even got him to the hospital. My mom was always trying to keep everything calm and in tact. She was tall, blonde, and had pretty blue eyes. She was always smiling and making the best of the situation. I definitely didn’t get my look, or attitude, from her. I was tall, brown haired, and had brown eyes. My mom always said I looked exactly like my dad. I heard my mom talking on the phone in the other room. I got up and grabbed the other land-line phone and listened in. “…Well who else got sick?” my mother asked. A man with a deep voice started talking and I recognized him as my principal, Mr. Gonzales, “Keith, Kayla, and Khloe Johnson, Taylor and Cassandra Layser, Mason Downey, Aaron Stepps, Tatum Oliver, Mitchie Tyler, and of course, your daughter.” My mom started making a humming noise on the other end of the phone. “Okay, thank you so much, Haydin is in her room resting so I better go check on her, thank you so much for calling.” Just as Mr. Gonzales was starting to thank her back, I clicked off the phone, and ran back to the table so my mom didn’t know I eavesdropped on her. I made it back to the table before she walked into the room. “Oh,“ she said surprised, “ Good Morning, Sweetie. Are you feeling better?” Her short curls were tied back in a bun and a pencil was stuck through it. She was also wearing a tank top and shorts, which meant she had been painting. She wasn’t a professional, she just did it for fun, but she was really good. “Not much better,” I say frowning, “I still feel dizzy all the time, and I am burning up.” She sat down oh-so-motherly next to me and patted my hand. “If you aren’t better by tomorrow, I’ll take you to the doctor.” I smile sympathetically, trying not to hurt her feelings, and shake my head “ok”. She kisses my forehead with her thin, pale lips and starts walking to the other room. “If you need me, just call me,” she said over her shoulder. I tried finishing my soup, but my stomach refused, so I just put it in the fridge.
i know that the tenses are all wrong, sorry about that! it was just an idea i had to jot down. and i ment to put in that the story is about 10 teenagers who get powers and they try and keep it a secret and there are bad guys after them and they are pretty much fighting off the bad guys. Im realy bad at explaining it, but it sounds better then the way i said it and thanks to everyone who commented!!! <3
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Answer by katey1801
i liked it