What do you think of this story?

What do you think of this story?
Here is a story I wrote is this: I ran as fast as I could without looking back. The warm tears on my face to the ice in the freezing wind. My feet were bad thorns that stood on the sidewalk. I looked at the full moon lighting my way. He looked so beautiful in the midnight sky. I wish it was not so nice, I wanted nothing to please you. I felt so scared. Maybe go to my father and try to kill me. I pushed the thought aside as I skipped the white fence that borders the beach. The grainy sand swallowed my feet with every step I took hard, as if asking me where I came back. For some strange reason, a smile flickered on my face. I placed I made a sand monster, after my father. In fact, I laughed and went into the water. As I reached the shore, I know how beautiful she was I gasped for air. There were waves in front of me and I heard the song of whales in the distance as if they were m called them. I felt like a princess, my long red hair shining in the moonlight. I ran into little waves and laughed and danced away. I realized that what it felt like to be carefree. I have it on my father and his alcoholic odor. I forgot, and his wife Charleston devilish smile. I was a princess tonight, with sparkling emerald eyes and a smile that makes the Dolphins come to me. I spread my arms wide and took a deep breath of sea air. Once I danced for about an hour, I broke the dry sand and laughed at me. My pants were soaked and my hair was wrapped around my forehead and ears. I looked at the moon dream to run away when I heard a crack of a twig behind me. I jumped to my feet and spun around. Leaning against the white fence and smiled at me my neighbors beautiful neighbor, Liam was. “They were really something in the waves,” he said. “If I could only have been here before.” He smiled at me and made me again bright red. He looked great, even if he was wearing a T-shirt and jeans. I smiled back and we stood there awkwardly for a while to smile, and until he the nerve to say something. wanted “Well, why do you not tell me why you thought alone here at midnight? When he, I realized how stupid I felt myself to be said here. He must’ve, I was immature. I’m away from him and I really was say that “I came here to escape, and I’m in love with you Will you marry me?” But I said. “No reason …” I heard “him to sit on the sand next to me, but I did not confront him. I turned my face toward the opposite side of me, where Liam was not. I just say to him about my father, but I decided at this time. It was nice to him next to me, as before Liam spoke again: “.? Well if you never get anywhere, why are you still here,” I have tried to ignore, and I hugged my knees and turned the other way . He was not on me, he never did when I wanted something to hide. “Emma?” What is really bad, “he said. “I know you, and you’re generally happy. What is it?” He turned his body to me, and he put his hand on my shoulder. If he did, I looked at him and saw his blue eyes sparkled. They danced and shone the light of concern sweet moon. I looked down and my eyes filled with tears. I slowly began to everything that had happened, to explain my father and how he … You know, was a stranger to this lady, and how his mother was totally ruined my mother’s estate, and finally I told him about his father gave me an F on my art drawings. I just wanted to say, I loved him but I heard him I did not know that yet. Liam looked at me with open mouth. It closed after a certain time, and he saw the sea looked so bright and so beautiful in the moonlight. I looked at my bare feet and dug in the sand. After a while Liam replied to a question, “Why are you?” I kept my foot buried, and saw with surprise, “I care because these people are part of my life. All that I made a difference in people’s lives, and each made a difference in my life. I care because … because … “Liam clasped his hands behind his head and lay down in the cool sand. He closed his eyes and said, “You have the answer to your problems.” I saw him out of his head, “What?” I do not have a solution, I was a kid and I’m just … “I stopped and thought for a moment. Liam looks at me from her bed of sand. He was not crazy, he was right. I had the answer all along. I realized that I have for my life is lived for me . sit two things I knew right then. One, I had to speak to two life, I was so stupid Liam leaned back and turned back to me “Now I need your opinion about something …. I like this girl … “He turned his face towards the sea again, but

reply from Ralph
Great dialogue! Keep it up